Pretty Crazy

Hi Jessxrawkz! I'm going to be honest but not too harsh ok? :) You seem to have a good idea here, but it does need a lot of work. OK ...

I love it!! It made me laugh and I really enjoyed this. Right now I'm wondering why I love a story about a spoon. Maybe because it's a nice change. ...

Good start. Catchy. It does need work though. The biggest thing I noticed was that you do too much telling and not enough showing. But then the knocking came from ...

Whoa, that was dark. Great start though, it hooks the reader and especially this ending: "Why did I start that fire?" I cried. "Why?" Post more soon because this is ...

Thanks for the PM! OK here's your review. It's still very interesting. I love the detail you have. Like this: I fiddled with a loose thread on my off-white t-shirt, ...

Hi brianbags! I enjoy the show too, so I was pleasantly surprised when I saw a Zack and Cody fanfic. One little thing that bugs me though is this: “Cody, ...

Is this set in the same time as that new Star Wars the Clone Wars show? I've seen some of them so this caught my interest. My brother (let's call ...

Nice start! :P A suggestion: try shortening this a little. Like divide it into two parts and post them separately. I don't really have any constructive criticism so this is ...

This is very real. Like it actually happened. To be honest it's a bit scary for me, the way you describe everything is so real it makes me wonder if ...

Awesome start. I love superpower stories! :lol: Post more soon OK? :P

There's really nothing for me to critique- except that I agree it's too long. I really enjoyed reading it, some parts felt like it was good enough to publish. Oh ...

Hi airbear320! No I don't think it's too much information for the first page. You seem to have an interesting idea. However, there's nothing that exciting to grab the reader's ...

Ooh, those guys are harsh! I read all the other parts you wrote and I like them. From what I can tell it's a good idea. I'm just not sure ...

Hello adrenalinefriend! First, I have to say that I love your writing style. It flows so nicely and it's nice and easy to follow. The story plot is good. Your ...

Hello peanut19! :D no it's not a good way to write: present tense. I kinda disagree with TheNewHero. Present tense is sometimes a good way to make the reader feel ...